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Deus Ex Machina by ~blackbird912:iconblackbird912:

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whispers of a world gone meaningless
it's dim now and close to colorless

all that's left is a brittle shell
recipe for your bitter hell

you watch it crawl through your veins
from a disconnected distance
it leaves you so souless
it leaves you so useless
it leaves you with nothing

everything is static and fading
everything is withering and dull
who's gonna play the victim
who's gonna dwindle away

you're a drone shuffling from high to high
you're alone living from lie to lie
©2006-2010 ~blackbird912
:iconblackbird912:

Author's Comments

This song has undergone quite a few changes, and I don't use every single line that I wrote when I sing this. I'm very happy with how its turned out and I can't wait until we finish recording this song along with the rest of our demo, which should be by January 30 2007.

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~Kaimu-Nanashi Sep 2, 2006, 6:05:12 PM
Ah, so you're the lyricist for you group? Cool.
Very interesting rhyme schemes, especially how it changes every stanza. Especially that of the first stanza.
It reminds me a bit of Emily Dickenson's style. Very nice.

You should do a remake of the version of this song you have on your MySpace account with you singing it.

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Write what you like. That way, you'll have at least one fan.
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~blackbird912 Dec 24, 2006, 9:42:00 PM
This song will be on myspace once we have completed our demo, which should be set by Jan. 30. The song has been renamed Deus Ex Machina, and I've also edited the lyrics since I put this up (probably fix that soon)

thanks for the comment

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~without the bitter, baby, the sweet ain't as sweet~
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~Lazipto Aug 3, 2006, 7:19:13 AM
its a great poem meagan..just like always n-n
but you know..its not all of you...what about your silly side..your smart side...your cute-sneezy side...what about your cute lil nose..n your cuddly'ness....ohh i'll just stop XD

but yes..i can see this becomeing a song...and as "ridiculyss" said...i can see that repeated....




oh and one more thing....how does the world look like color'less? -ponders-


well luf ya mweagans!!! -glomps n huggles- me misssss's youuuu!!! :heart:

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I am Jenny Ru! i :heart: lime green
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:heart: :pride: :heart:
Love Them..!
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POURQUOI!
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In artwork
LIME GREEN=AUTO :+fav:
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~blackbird912 Aug 3, 2006, 1:26:33 PM
Thanks!

I know that's not all of me lol, but I personally don't find my cute side to be very inspiring in terms of writing XD

I'll really have to give that second stanza some more thought then.

the colorless thing is a metaphor for my life/ the world feeling dull, mute, and gray. Hence the title

luv ya too and thanks again for the comment~

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~without the bitter, baby, the sweet ain't as sweet~
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~ridiculyss Aug 2, 2006, 3:37:57 PM
I think the second stanza would make a great chorus! For some reason I could just see it repeated and I think it'd all make a really wicked song, with the right tune. Great writing as always. :)

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"The snozberries taste like snozberries!!" :crazy:
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~blackbird912 Aug 3, 2006, 1:27:45 PM
Having the second stanza as a chorus is a good idea, I thought it was the most likely stanza so I'll have to think about that some more. Thanks for the comment!

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~without the bitter, baby, the sweet ain't as sweet~
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~xBrokenxFaithx Aug 2, 2006, 11:33:26 AM
I really like this. It has an odd set up that I like, it makes it interesting. That's what I get jelous about with real poem writers, they think of all these different ryhming patterns and pentameter thingamagigs that I would never think of in a million years. Damn you and your poetic ability! :shakefist:

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We real cool,
We left school,

We lurk late,
We strike straight,

We sing sin,
We thin gin,

We jazz June,
We die soon.
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~blackbird912 Aug 3, 2006, 1:19:47 PM
lol its not that fancy, all i did was a couple of rhymes and illiterations, and made sure that every line in the stanza had nine syllables, but thanks anyways! Take comfort dear, becuase I can't write stories for shit.

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~without the bitter, baby, the sweet ain't as sweet~
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~xBrokenxFaithx Aug 4, 2006, 12:13:13 PM
oh sure, make it seem all simple and stuff. Teehee, add us together and we would be good at EVERYTHING man.

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We real cool,
We left school,

We lurk late,
We strike straight,

We sing sin,
We thin gin,

We jazz June,
We die soon.
:iconblackbird912:
~blackbird912 Aug 5, 2006, 3:02:01 PM
most definitely, well at least when it comes to writing anyways

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~without the bitter, baby, the sweet ain't as sweet~
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